One Minute Closer Lichen Throat Early to bed on a school night, eyes still open wide, Tiny dots swirled in the dark, right at my bedside. Mom tucked me in an hour ago and kissed me on the chin. She said this day had run its course, never to return again. No matter how tight I try to hold, the secon...

Berkeley Social Scene—Nice atmospheric intro. All the instruments sound clear and distinct, and I like the interplay among them. Lyrically, I’m not sure what this is about. The vocal could be a little louder in the mix without hurting anything. I like that little tap on the ride cymbal. The guitar t...

Brown Word and the Big Whine—Mix your voice a little higher. This has a cool poetry slam vibe, and your concept is aesthetically consistent. I can’t get really get into it as a song, but all the sounds are cool. Damp Old Runt—Have you submitted here before under a different name? Your voice sounds f...

]Lichen Throat[/url] The names are slightly butchered and while I like the offbeat subject matter, I don't think these are your best lyrics... I am not a fan of "bad old" as the start of any line in a song intended for adults, nor of "my X did Y" in any song written after 1905. ...

I'm in. I'm not about to claim that this is an objectively good song, but I like it.

Wanderer above the Sea of Fog Lichen Throat Young man on a mountaintop in thoughtful solitude, Distant peaks as a backdrop, enduring image of fortitude. Wanderer above the sea of fog, icon of Romanticism. Nature is the synagogue; burn down Neoclassicism. Give me Wordsworth and Radcliffe, not Johnso...

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I think of the painting https://en.wikipedia.org/wiki/Wanderer_ ... Sea_of_Fog by Caspar David Friedrich

Hey, I used that painting for the "I Don't Like Crowds" cover!

I had trouble coming up with a topic for lyrics, and I had trouble with the music. Then I had trouble singing. Not my best work, but the best I could do this week.

Strike Me Down Lichen Throat Co-queen of the grass, Co-queen of the clay. No one could outclass Me and Hsieh Su-wei. Clasping calloused hands Across the Taiwan Strait. Walls between our lands; Can we be the gate? When I’m on the top You can’t strike me down. You can’t make me stop; You can’t take m...

I'm in, fashionably late, I hope.

Vanishing Twin Lichen Throat I’ve got a flat in London on a dark, narrow street. A big ugly guy with an evil eye Lives in there with me. He’s not there when I am, and I’m never out with him. We’re night and day, like bright and grey, A word and its antonym. He forgets all about me, and I just leave...

@JonPorobil I echo Duncan's comments. Thank you for the comprehensive reviews, and congratulations on the win. I really liked your song. I meant to write reviews, and I would have written great things about it.

Thank you, both. I'm finishing an English degree with an emphasis on Poetry. Two classes a semester (including the summer) and I should graduate in May 2023. Only one is in person, though, and that's this semester. Very stressful but I'm already acclimating so I hope it gets easier as we go. That's...

I'm in. The inspiration prompt resulted in a song from the point of view of a Shure 55S microphone.

No Help at All Lichen Throat I was made in a factory in Chicago, Illinois, A cardioid coil encased in a metal alloy. Elvis bought one like me, and so did Harry Truman. Recording famous words heard by every human. I can make you louder, But I can’t help your drawl. If you can’t thrill the crowd, I’m...

I'm in with what I think is one of my better songs. Sorry about the third verse lyrics, though; I've been reading War and Peace for two months, and it's slowly obliterating other sources of inspiration from my consciousness. (And Duncan, if you really want to know about the second verse: Today We Ch...

Dave Stiles—Good implementation of the optional holiday challenge. This sounds like a legit Christmas song. I like how your voice seems both understated and expressive. The bridge slowdown feels like an interruption to the song, rather than an enhancement. Good use of the sax. Duncan Martin—Good beg...

Brace Yourself Lichen Throat Let’s agree not to go to war; We’ll sign the Kellogg-Briand Pact. Violence is what we abhor; We’ll use diplomacy and tact To set a brand-new paradigm, And the nations will join a league. There will be peace in our time, No fighting, no blitzkrieg. Brace yourself, brace ...

the chord progression feels a little too familiar That's a very odd observation as it's a unusual chord progression: I > bIII > bVI > III I'm struggling to think of another song that uses the same pattern. I'd be curious to know some other examples of songs/pieces it's used in. I am insufficiently ...

Dave Stiles and the Breakthroughs—Good beginning. I like the verses, but I think this needs a bigger chorus. The mix is good, with the gritty guitars over the rhythm section. Duncan Martin—This gets a little better every time I listen to it. I like the connection among all the disparate narratives. ...

I'm a couple of days early for once.

Merry Christmas, everybody!

If You Believe It Lichen Throat Ahab wanted to go to war, So he asked four hundred prophets Who said, “You’ll be okay for sure. The Arameans have already lost it.” But Micaiah came and told the king, That dogs would lick his blood. Zedekiah didn’t believe this thing, And struck Micaiah where he sto...