No - that's just my accent. It sounds like "that" when I say "cunt". You were unconsciously self- censoring.HeuristicsInc wrote:- argh, i can hear that you… said “that” at least twice even though it’s not in the lyrics. Lyric-wise, is a bit too sweary for my tastes.
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Thank you linesmen. Thank you ballboys.
Once again, the disappointment of rejection is well and truly overwhelmed by the exhilaration gained from learning that I don't have to write another bloody song.
A great Nur Ein - very high quality. A pleasure to be involved.
And glad I got to exit in the honourable way - especially since I think my last song was the best of my bunch for the year (1 judge seemed to agree - the other 4 are clearly idiots).
Now Merisan - you better go on and win this bastard. Don't choke in the final like you did 3 years ago . Not that Skub doesn't deserve to win, he has been awesome (truly great to have you back Adam) - but he is Canadian...and they are essentially just New Zealander's that can't play rugby, so he deserves to lose...mind you , that Justin Trudeau is pretty dreamy....
Once again, the disappointment of rejection is well and truly overwhelmed by the exhilaration gained from learning that I don't have to write another bloody song.
A great Nur Ein - very high quality. A pleasure to be involved.
And glad I got to exit in the honourable way - especially since I think my last song was the best of my bunch for the year (1 judge seemed to agree - the other 4 are clearly idiots).
Now Merisan - you better go on and win this bastard. Don't choke in the final like you did 3 years ago . Not that Skub doesn't deserve to win, he has been awesome (truly great to have you back Adam) - but he is Canadian...and they are essentially just New Zealander's that can't play rugby, so he deserves to lose...mind you , that Justin Trudeau is pretty dreamy....
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Oh..and I have been really slack at reviewing this year - so I will just say that my rankings for this round would have been:
5 Skub
4 Merisan
3 Keep it Beautiful
2 Glenn Case (didn't like the "meta" sort of thing)
As I said - I really liked my song - but I had a terrible mix (spent too long trying to master loud...was I louder MG?)
And I broke out of my "autobiographic writing" thing that had hounded me all competition. This song was actually based on a very real incident that happened this week - but I extrapolated and exaggerated it beyond reality - which is my usual comfort zone.
5 Skub
4 Merisan
3 Keep it Beautiful
2 Glenn Case (didn't like the "meta" sort of thing)
As I said - I really liked my song - but I had a terrible mix (spent too long trying to master loud...was I louder MG?)
And I broke out of my "autobiographic writing" thing that had hounded me all competition. This song was actually based on a very real incident that happened this week - but I extrapolated and exaggerated it beyond reality - which is my usual comfort zone.
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The bored sounding delivery was deliberate. Probably didn't workManhattan Glutton wrote:I think I could get behind the crass lyrics more if they were delivered a little more like you personally mean them..
Thank you. I agree and I tried to emphasise that last line (I panned it back to centre) - but...poor production let it down.Manhattan Glutton wrote: Topped off with a fine vocal round at the end! It would have been fun to emphasize the last "you're on your own".
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And bugger it - we are all songwriters - why don't I elaborate on that.Caravan Ray wrote:
And I broke out of my "autobiographic writing" thing that had hounded me all competition. This song was actually based on a very real incident that happened this week - but I extrapolated and exaggerated it beyond reality - which is my usual comfort zone.
4 years ago, my ex wife chose to be a single mother - and for a lot of that time I was self-employed so my daughter stayed with me during school holidays while she worked. But I just started a new full-time job, so with school holidays coming up again, she realised I can no longer look after our daughter and she gets the full implication of being a "single mum". Now - to her credit - she has not said a word in protest. My song was about the imaginary scenario where she did protest.
This is how I like to write - taking a real thing, and stretching it.
Whereas in round four...well, that was all real and I probably shouldn't have written about it. (Still - I did have sex with an opera singer on a cricket pitch....high fives anybody?)
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Caravan Ray wrote:Thank you. I agree and I tried to emphasise that last line (I panned it back to centre) - but...poor production let it down.
Anyway, I didn't realize a volume difference between your track and the others OR any annoying artifacts, so mission accomplished! You made a great song, and the problem was that all the songs were great.
** I feel like I've uncovered a good rule: "if you can replace the title with 'fuck you' in the lyrics, the title was irrelevant".
*** If I were the artist, I would be so annoyed right now. It's hard enough writing a damn song in a week.
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To pontificate more on the title: "Excuse Me" is particularly difficult to convey satisfactorily, especially without the letter 'a'.
Some more hot title-takes for the other contestants:
Skub - Why not use the title to emphasize the door-to-door salesdemon aspect? Was starting with "excuse me, could I get 10 second of your time?" too easy? Instead, he used "excuse me" as the response, which feels a bit wedged-in, unnecessary, and a lost opportunity.
73kib - This one's a better use of the title, but surrounded by some disjointed lyrics. The interjection could have been aided by being a little more conversational, a little more real-time-feeling.
Glenn Case - Title is used appropriately in a standard way as a prominent interjection, if maybe a little too much so.
Merisan - Rather open to interpretation, as it doesn't use the title. It feels like some of the verse phrases have an implicit "excuse me" in the normal sense, but there's also a tie-in to "use me if you need an excuse", which could turn "excuse" into a verb meaning "to use as an excuse".
Some more hot title-takes for the other contestants:
Skub - Why not use the title to emphasize the door-to-door salesdemon aspect? Was starting with "excuse me, could I get 10 second of your time?" too easy? Instead, he used "excuse me" as the response, which feels a bit wedged-in, unnecessary, and a lost opportunity.
73kib - This one's a better use of the title, but surrounded by some disjointed lyrics. The interjection could have been aided by being a little more conversational, a little more real-time-feeling.
Glenn Case - Title is used appropriately in a standard way as a prominent interjection, if maybe a little too much so.
Merisan - Rather open to interpretation, as it doesn't use the title. It feels like some of the verse phrases have an implicit "excuse me" in the normal sense, but there's also a tie-in to "use me if you need an excuse", which could turn "excuse" into a verb meaning "to use as an excuse".
If I had a dollar for every one of my songs j$ has called a 90s pastiche, I'd have $1 for every song I've written.
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